Hey bloggers,
Sorry I haven't posted in a while but here is my 100WC, hope you enjoy :)
A dark foreboding cloud, lurked over the forest on a silent cold winter's night. As the smoke cleared you could see the young extravagant girl sitting in the silence; but the silence was too deadly almost unbearable so much so that she couldn't help but scream out in pain because she could not conceal the guilt inside of her.
Inside of her innocence was all that she was fighting for but some spec of guilt was still present.
As the sun started to set the dark shadows loomed around me, almost as dark as my broken soul. Nightmares still prevail...
a good story, just remember to put a couple more commas into the story
ReplyDeleteKatie you were really great on description. You can picture it in our brains thanks for your excellent work.
ReplyDeleteI found myself trying to picture who you describe as 'the young extravagant girl' and what a pity you did not have more words to afford to the description. You have created a fascinating character including describing some of her inner thoughts. Do you envisage that your character's 'broken soul' can be repaired?
ReplyDeleteI look forward to your next blog post.
Hi Katie
ReplyDeleteI love the way your writing opens, it quickly sets the scene for the reader and using words like foreboding ensures that the reader knows that it's not going to be a happy story!
There's a fine balance between using great description and using too much, make sure that your word choices don't take away from the story itself.
Keep up the great work
Miss T
Hampshire, England